Showing posts with label Week 4. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 4. Show all posts

Sunday, September 18, 2016

Feedback Focus

Personally, I find that reading out loud and writing my comments as I go is the easiest and most effective way for me to focus on a story. When reading out loud I generally grab my dog and read to her. She's not very attentive but it feels more productive and less silly than reading out loud by myself in my room. I actually already use the reading out loud technique when reading really complicated articles  for other classes like my social theory class. Sometimes it's very easy to miss a sentence, to lose focus and daydream, or just not understand a jumble of word salad if you only try parsing it out in your head. Reading out loud keeps me focused and critical.

I generally use a slightly different form of the copy-paste and delete technique. I generally follow the copy-paste, but I don't delete every paragraph once I'm done, I just add my notes in the middle. This is pretty helpful especially on a second reading because it's really easy for me to forget what I just read and have to read it over. If I already have short notes for it, I can remember much more easily.

The timer technique really seemed more bothersome than helpful. I always find myself with a couple minutes leftover after I'm done reading. Furthermore I also find it hard to concentrate on something for a full ten minutes. My mind constantly wanders any time I'm doing anything and I think setting a timer for myself makes me concentrate more on the timer and in some weird way I focus too much on focusing to actually read well. The other two techniques work much better.

(focusing is hard, wikipedia)

Thursday, September 15, 2016

Story: The Crow and the Prisoner

Desperate and alone she waited in that stinking hovel. Carried off by her scorned ex-lover and doomed to die in this prison in the woods. Her father, a brave and glorious knight, surely he was looking for her; surely he’d come to find her before she died. That man whom she’d once sworn to marry, he’d left her with little food and only a dog bowl of water. She slept on the dirt and made waste into a shallow hole in the ground. No body kept her company save the light of the moon. She sat at the low window to her prison and watched its slow crawl across the night sky. In the light of the moon, a shadow flickered.
Swooping fast past the prison she caught only a glimpse but she called out, “Oh! Brave sir, or kind madam please do me pity and find me here. I have been taken by the man who swore to love me and am left here to die! If you do love riches my father, the knight Gerald will surely supply them for he must very much want me back!”
            At this the shadow, not a man nor a woman, but a crow circled back to alight on the window sill. Wondering, it cocked its head and her, disappointed, turned away from the visitor.
            “Oh but a crow,” said sighed. “Although you are a large and beautiful bird you cannot pull the bars from these cages. Perhaps though, you may give me a bit of company for I am most desperately lonely in this cage.”
            Turning the her, the crow stare and opened its beak wide and spoke, “Dear madam I may not be strong enough to free you from your prison but I am a teller of tales. If you should listen, perchance I could provide you comfort in your dark time.
            And with little else to do, the young woman agreed and as she sat upon the dirt floor the crow began his first tale.
            A carpenter, a goldsmith, a tailor, and a hermit went camping one night in the woods and as they sat ‘round their campfire they discussed who might take watch against the bandits and creatures of the night. Being of strong and sturdy conviction, the carpenter did agree to take first watch and, as his companions fell asleep, he soon took to carving to keep him occupied and alert. He was quick and sure, and soon from a large block of wood the visage of a woman was hewn and kept him company through his watch, but soon his shift was over and the goldsmith took his place. Finding before him a beautiful figure, he was amazed and, admiring its beauty, committed to making a glittering set of gold jewelry with which to adorn her figure. As soon as he was finished and fast asleep the tailor rose to take his watch and, finding a striking woman decked in gold, he set about making her a fine set of clothes to complement her beauty. As he slept and at last the hermit did wake, the last man exclaimed to find a well adorned and lovely woman standing among them at the camp. He, at once, used his ancient magic to bring her now to life and, as the other men woke, they all found among them a beautiful, living woman brought forth from their combined labors through the night.
            Immediately the carpenter laid claim to her, “She is mine for I carved her body from the wood. I have done the bulk of the work and now I will take her as my wife.”
            The goldsmith, in anger fired back, “I have given her gold and jewels for her person! Having invested the most money into her I must have the most steadfast claim.”
            Not to be left out, the tailor exclaimed “If not for me she would stand before us naked and ashamed. I have given her dignity in clothes and so her virtue belongs to me!”
            The hermit, for his part, said “I am the one who has brought her to life. She belongs to me and no other. If not for my magic, we would be arguing for a lifeless statue now.”
            Among the arguing, the woman stood listening, and she realized that none of these men cared of her opinion towards them. These men disgusted her with their entitlement. They knew that she now lived but asked neither for her opinion nor her name. And as they argued she stole away into the night, belonging never to them but to herself now. And they did not realize till morning that their prize was gone and by then she was too far away for them to pursue.
            As the crow finished his tale he looked down to see the maiden sleeping peacefully upon the dirt floor and, again, he flew off into the night.
            As the morning sun arose and the woman awoke to find herself alone again in her wretched prison she began to weep for she believed she would never be free as the woman from the story. But as she cried, her voice was carried on the wind and soon was drowned out by thundering hoof beats. In fear and excitement, she rose to the window to see her father, dressed in shining armor, a regiment at his back, and a talking crow upon his shoulder. In short time they pried the bars from her hovel and she ran to her father, clinging to him in his armor.
            “Thank you little friend,” she said to the bird. “I thought you had abandoned me but you have brought my salvation. As promised you shall have your pick of whatever riches you want of our estate and are welcomed to live among us at your leisure.”

            And the crow took to living among them as a storyteller, giving company to the lonely, and hope to the hopeless.

(carving of a woman, pixabay)

Author's Note: Okay I really wanted to make this one longer and have the crow relate multiple stories to her as he did in the original tale but I clearly didn't have the room for that. I couldn't smash the told stories down into a paragraph like I had wanted so I just told one story and stretched it out a bit longer. I think the lead up to the story took longer than I thought it would but I got this in just under 1000 so I'm happy with how it turned out.

 The Tooti Nameh or Tales of a Parrot, by Ziya'al-Din Nakhshabi (1801)

Wednesday, September 14, 2016

Reading Notes: Tales of a Parrot B

A short bit of notes since i set up most of my story yesterday, sorting through the second half of the stories for one i like.

the third story will be the nobleman who concealed a snake in his sleeve. this story is one of being taken hostage but, in the end, destroying their captor.

most of these stories will be minimally changed besides being shortened considerably. this ends with the woman being killed but that would be a kind of terrible end for the story. i'll just have her be rescued by a search party and the crow can tell them all of the whereabouts of her captor.

(African grey parrot, web source)

 The Tooti Nameh or Tales of a Parrot, by Ziya'al-Din Nakhshabi (1801)

Tuesday, September 13, 2016

Reading Notes: Tales of a Parrot

This starts out as a parrot that can make prophecies. Parrots are an obvious choice for fortune tellers as they are one of the few animals that can mimic human speech. I may change this to a crow since they can also mimic speech and I just really like crows.

If I want to fit in not only the background information but also probably 3 of the stories from this collection I will have to make each section very short. I will need: Introduction -> Story 1 -> Story 2 -> Story 3 -> Conclusion. This will probably take the full 1000 words.

I'm also thinking, rather than an adulterer, this will be a story of a captured young girl, who begs the crow at the window to her room to tell her stories. The crow, being gentle and kind, obliges and tells her stories every night before she sleeps until, in the end, she is rescued.

I'll use the story of the carpenter, goldsmith, taylor, and hermit for one story. The beginning will stay mostly the same but in the end, rather than a tree saving the wooden woman, I think she will simply refuse to be kept prisoner by any of them and will disappear into the night. This should give the imprisoned girl hope for escape.

The Fowler, the Parrot, and her young ones is another tale of imprisonment. These go nicely with my original theme so I will probably use this one unless I find a better one later in the text.

For the third story I will probably look through the second half of the reading tomorrow.

(Manuscript containing Tales of the parrot, 18th century, RCP archives) 


 The Tooti Nameh or Tales of a Parrot, by Ziya'al-Din Nakhshabi (1801)